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Elijah – a man of passions

Thank you soooooooo much for helping Elijah and Obadiah.
They eagerly await your critique of this leg of the journey.
When we last saw them…

Elijah stooped and rested Zim in his mother’s arms.
She kissed Zim’s forehead and then gazed up at Elijah. Her voice shook at first but finished strong. “Young man, I see it now. You are from God, and the Lord puts truth in your mouth.”
Zim grinned at Neetz, his mouth framing words. She bent to him, but Zim sat up. “You got any more figs?”
If you did not critique this as soon as you hoped, I’ll be happy to send you the latest draft.
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