I read about a page and a half, puzzling about the feeling that this was the same scene I’d just read, told differently. Then I realized you were telling it from Joshabiah’s POV. Although it’s very common to alternate POVs in a story, I wasn’t expecting it, so I was confused. Will you be using […]
ENVIRONMENT What is the weather/temperature/climate What kind of lighting is present What time of day is it What time of year is it SETS Indoors : What is the type and size of the room/enclosure she is occupying? How is it furnished? Outdoors: What is the terrain (hilly, marshy, rocky, lush, dusty, etc)? What plants, […]
Typos hide from me. They think it’s a game. Implausible plot twists sneak in during the night. Please reveal them to me. And if you would be so kind as to do a serious critique of a chapter, ask and ye shall receive it in MS Word format. Dave
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